Sarah commented on my page early, which is really helpful since I can use her comments to edit my page before I leave for my trip with my yearbook staff to the Columbia Scholastic Press Association conference. She gave us great specific advice to look again at the formatting options, and we added alt-text to our images plus more links to outside resources. These links are what I think really improve our page, as now people can read the Narcissus myth, see the specific texts that reference McLuhan the most, and read even more about McLuhan.
Once I got back from my trip, I found Amanda's and Wil's comments and was able to finetune our page more. I added in the summary more explanation of why, although it is so much shorter, Part I is the most important part of the book. I also tried to make it clearer why we did not discuss every single chapter of Part II by explaining that they are more like individual essays to read to understand the applications of his theories. I also tried to make it clear that McLuhan did not write about our current digital technologies -- that had confused Wil, and I hope it is clearer now that the Facebok example is our application of his theory not his application of it. Finally, I took out an image on the left that Wil commented on not understanding because it really was just put there for having an image not for a very clear purpose.
I commented the same on others' pages as Amanda commented on ours: they are just so text heavy! We actually tried to minimize this by making the text size smaller, but she recommended the opposite. This is user opinion clearly, and I decided not to change the size. Her question about the YouTube video was one that points out a frustration we have with the site -- we were not able to size down the video to fit the column width no matter what we tried, so that was our compromise!